Good evening everyone,
I have just started to write my first essay since high school. It is very intimidating to me because I do not make it a habit to write very often. I have started the journal, and it seems to help a little. I was wondering if you would please take a look at what I have written so far, and answer a few of the questions I have. I will put my questions at the bottom. I am required to write a descriptive essay about someone who has inspired me, and write about one way they have inspired me.
ESSAY: FIRST DRAFT
What does someone do to inspire you? To me, inspiration is the process of instilling faith in someone to motivate him or her to do something. Many people do things simply out of the kindness in their heart, and do not realize they are inspiring others around them.
To me, my husband Dave inspires me the most. He is a very loving and caring person. He gives me the strength in my heart to do whatever I put my mind to. He inspires me to do things by example. He inspires me most when I see how his generosity makes other people feel, and how good it makes him feel because of their reaction. From that example, it makes me want to do something so I can experience the same feeling.
Dave always inspires me to make goals for myself, chase my dreams, and to do things to help others. He volunteers whenever he can. A few of his favorites are Cub Scouts, Drug Awareness Programs, Children's Hospitals, Supporting our Veterans, Community Highway Clean-up, and Habitat for Society. He is also very dedicated to helping his country. He has been in the United States Navy for almost 20 years as a Senior Chief Builder in the Seabees. He will retire soon, but his desire to help our country and community will continue.
It was one rainy evening in particular I will never forget. We were sitting in the living room discussing his plans for a motorcycle run to raise money for the Veterans Hospital in Hampton Virginia. The TV was playing in the background, and our son was sitting at the kitchen table working on his homework. In the middle of our conversation, his cell phone rang. He stepped outside to take the call, and I went to check our son's progress with his homework. When he came back into the house, he did not say a word. He just turned the volume on the TV up, and started to watch the coverage for the upcoming hurricane.
He began to explain the phone call he had just received. It was from his boss in the military. He said if the hurricane were going to be as strong as they think it will be, he would have to leave right away to be there for the disaster recovery. This started to make me worry about what was going to happen to the motorcycle run. We had over 200 people already pre-registered, the t-shirts ordered, the food was being prepared, the permits were in hand, and the police escort had already been set up. I knew this was something Dave was passionate about, and it had to go on.
Suddenly, on August 29, Hurricane Katrina hit the Gulf coast. There was severe damage mostly in the cities of Mobile, Alabama, Waveland, Biloxi/Gulfport, Mississippi, and New Orleans. At least 1,836 people lost their lives due to the severe storm surge damage. Dave was ready to go as soon as he heard the news, so he could provide help to those who lost everything.
More than 3,000 U.S. Navy Seabees from all over the United States aided in the hurricane Katrina relief efforts. Hurricane Katrina was so devastating; Dave and his crew volunteered to stay longer, and could not make it back in time for the motorcycle run for the veteran's hospital.
His passion to help his community, and our country inspired me to take over the motorcycle run. I wanted to make a difference in people’s lives just as Dave would have done. He wanted to make life a little easier not only for our veterans in the hospital, but also the people who lost everything due to the hurricane. After a lot of hard work and dedication, it was a very rewarding feeling knowing I could help that day. The motorcycle run was a huge success, and we were able to present them with a check for over five thousand dollars.
Without the inspiration from my husband, and continuing to do things out of the kindness of his heart, I would not have been motivated to do the things I have done. He continues to inspire me to do things everyday, and I would not be the person I am today without him.
1. I am worried about my commas and semi-colon usage. When I listed the things he volunteers for, did I need to use a comma or a semicolon when I said "a few of his favorites are"
2. "He said if the hurricane were going to be as strong as they think it will be, he would have to leave right away to be there for the disaster recovery." Did I use the word were properly?
3. "There was severe damage mostly in the cities of Mobile, Alabama, Waveland, Biloxi/Gulfport, Mississippi, and New Orleans." Did I list the names correctly?
Any and all help would be greatly appreciated. Thank you so much for your time.
Inspiration is everywhere — from the words of your favorite writer to the blooms and leaves on your morning walk. You just need to open your eyes, and breathe it in.
Sometimes it helps to talk to others who are creative to get ideas about what gets their creativity juices flowing.
Here, 10 creative people share the various things that inspire their beautiful works.
Breanna Radermacheris a print and web designer in the Minneapolis area.
As a designer, I find myself planted in front of a computer screen for long hours at a time; it’s a part of my job, after all. While it’s easy to say that I find loads of inspiration through visual blogs and social media websites like Pinterest (which I do), the truth is that I’m most inspired by stepping away from the screen.
Whether I’m going for a walk around town or road-tripping across the states, it’s always a breath of fresh air. Intriguing and different. Inspiration, truly, is everywhere. You just need to open your eyes a little bit to see it all around you.
Melissa Tydell is a Chicago-based freelance writer.
It sometimes feels so innate, so natural to me as a writer, and I think I find inspiration in many places and spaces…Reading other people’s writing gets my imagination working.
I do some of my best thinking when I can’t sleep in the middle of the night or when I’m away from my computer; in those quiet moments, I sometimes practically “write” an entire piece in my head before I actually sit down to type it out. But in thinking more about your question…
I find inspiration in the everyday. I am fascinated by relationships of all types–happy ones, complicated ones, unusual ones. Through writing, I often attempt to dissect the meaning behind something that has happened or to describe a particular feeling or emotion.
I enjoy the challenge of communicating what we each experience in our everyday lives, bringing those unique moments to life through words and sentences.
And what is really wonderful about writing is that I can pass on that inspiration; if I can clearly communicate some aspect of life, if I can inform or entertain the people who read my writing, I may also have the opportunity to inspire them as well.
Laura Simmsis a career coach who helps creatives discover and thrive at work they love.
I’m inspired by risk. Starting something I have no idea how to finish, witnessing people go for something new – anything that has the potential for failure (but not total disaster) gets my heart and creativity pumping.
[For instance], a few years ago I got really into “The West Wing” and Aaron Sorkin’s writing. I wanted to get in touch with Aaron, but figured getting past his people would be difficult. I went an unconventional route and started a blog called “Letters to Aaron Sorkin” where I would write short letters to him on a regular basis. I made it a game with rules for myself like I couldn’t directly try to contact him other that through my letters. He eventually discovered the blog and emailed me. It was such a fun experiment, but definitely riskier than writing his agent.
The best part was that friends found out about my mission and got really excited about participating. One friend surprised me with a ticket to a screening and talk-back of a Sorkin film, so I got to hear him speak in person. It was fun to know that my game inspired people to take action on my behalf much more than asking around for favors.
Jess Constableis the designer and founder of Jess LC and author of the blog Makeunder My Life.
For topics on makeundermylife.com, I’m most inspired by things I face and work through in my daily life. Those lessons learned are perfect for posts that may help others as well. When it comes to Jess LC, I get inspired by color and pattern in interior design and love to translate that to lifestyle accessories in a new way. It’s a great place to look, which translates so well!
Elizabeth Patchblogs, writes and illustrates on the topic of positive body image for women and girls of all sizes. She is the author and illustrator of More to Love and is currently working on a children’s book to encourage girls to follow their dreams, regardless of their weight.
I’ve learned that when I am feeling uncreative and blocked, I need to accept this as a time to read and research, and allow the input to stew in the back of my mind until it is ready to appear. And then my ideas often spring out fully formed when I am engaged in some sort of simple, quiet, solo task not related to “art:” weeding the garden, knitting, taking a walk, arranging a bouquet of flowers, sitting on the swing in my backyard.
I have also learned that my best work comes when I don’t really care about the outcome, when I am just messing around with the art supplies. True creativity requires a willingness to play with the raw materials, whether those materials are words, paint, pixels, fabric, whatever!
Jessica Swiftis a full-time artist and surface pattern designer.
I get a lot of inspiration from long walks through my neighborhood. Being outside and moving my body gets my creative juices flowing! I love nature and the organic shapes of flowers, leaves, and trees, and I often use these types of shapes in my work.
I’m also hugely inspired by color and am constantly saving images online and in magazines for color inspiration. I love combining colors in unusual ways, and the act of simply playing with color, whether it’s on a canvas with paint or on my computer screen, inspires a lot of ideas for me.
A lot of the messages in my artwork are uplifting, positive, and hopeful; I’ve always been a worrier throughout my life, so I often use my artwork as a way to reassure myself that everything will be OK.
I’m also inspired by the idea of creating artwork that lifts other people up and reassures them in their own lives. I find that people are always looking for more positivity and happiness in their lives, and my art is my way of offering that to people. It’s endlessly inspiring to know that I can make some sort of difference [in] people’s attitudes toward themselves and their own lives.
Catherine Just is a photographer and creator of Soul*Full e-courses and retreats.
My photography is inspired by both internal and external realities. For the series called “ Nap Time” I took a situation in my life with my son that was stressful for me. My son would not nap and I wanted more “me” time. So instead of suffering, I created a ritual of taking photos of my son and I as soon as he fell asleep. This transformed a situation that caused me stress into the most amazing experience. I now have hundreds of these photos of our naptime together and have documented our relationship during this once-in-a-lifetime experience with my son.
I also get inspiration by investigating my life. Pulling it apart at the seams and seeing what’s inside. A bit like an archaeologist who is digging for clues. I look underneath the surface of what is seen, to find the places that are not seen but felt. The spaces and places that have no words. The spiritual aspects of life.
The creative process itself brings me to a place of being totally present and that process itself is inspiring. Just the act of looking through the viewfinder slows me down and I am at once connected with what I see. I would say that I see my version of God or the energy of the Universe through the lens. The way the light falls on a leaf, the way your eyes sparkle in the sunlight, the way the shadows dance on the grass. The experience of really noticing the world around me and within me is the greatest inspiration of all.
Amanda Gentheris a graphic and web designer working with passionate creative businesses around the world.
My biggest source of inspiration is nature. I’m drawn to green plants and bright flowers. I almost instinctively choose the more natural products to represent my own brand (natural wood USB drives, kraft envelopes).
In order to be surrounded by inspiration and find new inspiration, I think it’s important to get out of your office every week to take a walk, go for a run or drink a cup of coffee. For me, surrounding myself with this inspiration keeps me motivated.
Since I am a designer and could be working on up to 7 projects every week, my source of inspiration is constantly changing and evolving. For each project, the client and I create an inspiration board, and it helps if I wait around 1 week to even start sketching to allow the inspiration to sort of sink in. Sometimes I’ll infuse a source of inspiration from one project into the next and the outcome is so much more developed.
Flora Bowley is an internationally celebrated painter, teacher, author and inspirationalist.
Although the source of my creativity is fueled by many things such as nature, travel, personal transformation, textiles, poetry and all things colorful, I find my deepest well of inspiration simply in the *process* of creating something out of nothing.
As a rule, I never know what my paintings will look like before I begin and this mystery is exactly what creates the excitement and curiosity I need to stay inspired. I rely on my intuition and the concept of “working with what’s working” to keep momentum as my paintings emerge naturally on their own time.
I also embrace the freedom to change courses many times along the way, knowing each and every choice will be an important part of the finished painting. By letting go of desired outcomes, I open myself to a world where anything is possible and there are no mistakes–a great place to find inspiration!
Alexandra Frazen is a writer, blogger and digital entrepreneur.
I am inspired . . .
By yoga. Specifically, folding upside down. It’s where I get my best ideas. Go figure.
By magazines. Good ones. The kind with exquisite photography, fascinating essays, and ads that aren’t about melting your belly with mystical tablets. My favorite magazines are: Travel & Leisure (I love fantasizing about renting a private island & stone castle, off the coast of Scotland!); Martha Stewart Living (elegant food porn); Real Simple (an OCD gal’s organizational dream!); The Atlantic (makes me feel smarty-smart, like NPR); and the lil’ magazine they tuck into the Sunday NY Times.
By off-line conversations. Kicking it old school over tea & red velvet cake truffles. Giggles don’t translate on Twitter.
By problems. As a writer, I solve problems with words. There’s nothing more satisfying that finding the right turn of phrase to transform the murkiest muddle of madness into something so elegantly precise.
By my mom. She’s just brilliant.
By myself. I aim for astonishment, daily.